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The Thing About Cliches by ~summernightangel:iconsummernightangel:



I.
If this were a cliché,
A poem, or both
It would be about sparkling midnight skies and heartbeats and flowers and sex.

There would be oceanic eyes and rain that tastes like tears. We’ll throw in anxiety-riddled murmurs and metaphorical bullets and allusions to sharp objects for pity.

This is not a cliché anymore.

So instead I wrote about the flavor of emerald and the fragrance of April hope. I painted pictures of a perfect pencil, poised over a blank page.

II.
If this were a romance,
A message in a bottle, or both
It would still be cliché, to capture electric fingers and longings locked away with skeleton keys, and drugs.

We’d find footprints in the sand and read angels into them. We’d collect rejected roses, tarnished rings, and hopeful held breaths where the tides washed them up, tie them up with ribbon, and cork it all away for someone else to worry about.

This is not a romance either.

So instead I baked coffee cake while it rained, and picked the weeds from the garden to display in crystal carafes. I inhaled the moon when the clouds parted, and loved myself alone.

III.
If this were a slow-dance song,
A diary, or both,
Our ballet shoes would get dirty after too many last calls, enough encores already, and our hands would cramp up after calligraphy, too, became cliché.

Which is why I’m tired of writing roses and champagne and fairytales, and pouring senseless images on your head like cloudbursts. I’m bored with the old evening gowns and hinting at seduction, and sick of lonely letters written from the highest tower in the castle.

This is not a song-and-dance act.

So instead I’m trying something new. It’s sleeping in the sun and eating ice-cream sandwiches under the bleachers, and driving around barefoot because crazy things make me smile. It’s paper-clip necklaces and yoga on beach towels in the backyard.

IV.
If this were a cliché,
A suicide note, or both
It would have capital letters at the bottom which said THE END. It would be about changing seasons and candles burning out and taking life’s clichés into your own hands. It would be bittersweet irony, but it would still have been just one in a long line.

I am dead serious. The thing about clichés is that we’re all stereotypes in high definition and living is just a chance to blow the subs. Because truth be told, I’m just an idiom of blue eyes and black-and-silver dreams, and I love walks on the beach and scenic drives on the moon and idyllic cemetary cathedrals.

This is not a cliché, because it admits to being one.

So instead I’m stealing every old starry-eyed platitude and flaunting it at my fingertips. Because the truth is that we don’t know the truth, and we’re all dying, and we’re all burning like stars, and all we have is emotion to separate us from vegetables. All we have is screaming and crying and dancing until we collapse, all we can do is laugh and bleed and hold on tight, all we are is feeling.
And sometimes that’s enough.
:iconsummernightangel:

Author's Comments

This became prosetry somewhere in there, but I don't care.

I like it. I hope you like it.

I'm happy today, and it feels so good.

This is just taking all that stuff that poetry- my poetry- tends to be about, and saying screw it, that's overused, here's life.

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-03-25

"The Thing About Cliches by ~summernightangel breaks and redefines old romance cliches. It's nothing short of magical," notes the suggester about this prose-poem. Some great lines in this that bully the mother-clothed, glass-wearing nerd that is the cliché to get with the times. (Suggested by ~Amertie and Featured by ^fllnthblnk)

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:iconmaniasdoor:
Absolutely flawless. <3
:iconcouramours:
This is a beautiful, beautiful piece of writing! I love it, from the style, the structure, the words, the emotion, the feeling, the imagery, the...hell, just the life inside of it.

Something about this just hit home. Possibly the fact that I've been thinking, all we ever do is float through life, exist, yearn, and just live. And then this...this said all of that and more, much, much more. Wonderful work, you are a very good writer.

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This is where I have always been coming to. And when I go away from here, this will be the mid-point to which everything ran, and from which everything will run. But now, my love, we are here, and those other times are running elsewhere.
:iconsweetblackrose13:
Oh my gosh. This is probably one of the most beautiful thing you've ever written, and that's saying something. You're so talented. I absolutely love the emotion, the way it flows, the imagery, everything. It really makes a person think. I don't know what to say.. <3
:iconsummernightangel:
thank you so much <3

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~summernightangel doesn't need a compass to know which way the wind is shining.
:iconsummernightangel:
Thank you does not cover it. Writing is a good way to figure out life. :heart:

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~summernightangel doesn't need a compass to know which way the wind is shining.
:iconsummernightangel:
Thank you is a cliché response to such a sweet comment. It's really nice to get feedback- I think this is one of my best pieces too. Thanks for brightening my day a bit :heart:

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~summernightangel doesn't need a compass to know which way the wind is shining.
:iconsweetblackrose13:
You're welcome is also a cliché response.. But after reading that, I wish I could make your day as bright as.... as bright as... um.. as bright as it could be without melting your eyes and blinding you........ ^^
And besides, you brightened my day by showing me that Stephenie Meyer hasn't completely destroyed the literary world.. that there are people like you out there to save the earth from shiny-anguished-vampire destruction.
:iconcouramours:
Very, very true. :heart: Your welcome, just keep doing what you're doing.

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This is where I have always been coming to. And when I go away from here, this will be the mid-point to which everything ran, and from which everything will run. But now, my love, we are here, and those other times are running elsewhere.
:iconsummernightangel:
*snort* :lol: Ahahah, I think I love you for that. I like sparkly things, and I like vampires, but the two should not mix.

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~summernightangel doesn't need a compass to know which way the wind is shining.
:iconsweetblackrose13:
XD Well if you agree, then I love you too.
Heehee. Sparkly things. And I was into vampires way before twiligt.. when they were EVIL and BLOODTHIRSTY like they're SUPPOSED to be =(

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